6D 2012 – 2013
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For Pie Corbett (Cover it Live)
Slowly, the moon glimmered and glittered, like glitter and sparkles, in the starry night sky. Softly, unicorn’s horn shone, glimmering and glittering, over the silent night! As Princessa opened her curtains, her face shone! Thousands of unicorns fill the town, like a tap filling a bath with water. Gracefully, the glittering unicorns galloped through the dark lane, lightening the people’s spirits. Princessa was so excited, she ran outside, in her pyjamas, and jumped on the unicorn’s back! Later that day, the unfortunate unicorn found himself stuck in dungeon in the enormous castle owned by the greatest warlord ever known to man kind. The whirlpool of glimmering stars sucked the suns light. An angel looked down, and kept staring at the glimmering unicorn. Not able to take it’s eyes away from the beauty that was within the unicorn. His horn was sparkling in the magical light for all it was worth, although it was no use to the warlord’s power! His lighting stroke down on the castle!
Princessa woke up with a start! She had had a bad dream! She knew it wasn’t JUST a dream! She had to save the unicorn, but she didn’t know how to get there! She packed her bags and left the house! She set off, strolling into the sunset!
It was as bright as the sun itself, yet way more powerful and bright. Rapidly, the unicorn glided gracefully through the sky, leaving a trail of sparkles behind it as it passed a white, icy lake. It stomped on the ground and galloped towards the tiny village, it seemed so , because of the unicorn. It’s horn glowed like a angelic, golden wish in the pitch black darkness. Trees turned their roots just to look at the beast, flowers grew to the sky to get a glimpse of it. When the unicorn comes, nothing seems the same, because of Princessa and her magic! She changed everything!
8 Responses to “For Pie Corbett (Cover it Live)”
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January 30th, 2013 at 9:16 pm
Wow , I can tell that you totally identify with Princessa
and would love to live in her magical land alongside her. Have the books and stories that you have read inspired you to write in this style?
January 31st, 2013 at 8:20 am
Thank you! I have magpied ideas from my class mates and the book ‘The magical Unicorn!’
January 31st, 2013 at 12:01 pm
Wow! An amazing story you described very well and was good to read.It is just the right length as well. well done!
from your friend Harvey maple class
January 31st, 2013 at 12:09 pm
really good story, I loved that you used lots of describing sentences and similes.
from,
Pav ash
January 31st, 2013 at 2:02 pm
Thank you Harvey! Thank you Pav!
February 1st, 2013 at 2:33 pm
Hi,
I love your story
February 3rd, 2013 at 9:25 pm
Dear Aaron,
What do you like about charlotte’s story? Does the story have great vocabulary, I certainly think so?
Hope to hear from you.
February 5th, 2013 at 12:12 am
You used great describing words! It was so good, I could visualize the story in my head! I like how you included the dream!