6D 2012 – 2013
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My Snow Poem! (COVER IT LIVE)
Snow, snow, snow! Everywhere!
Covers the ground, here and there!
A blanket of frost,
With a snowman, completely lost!
The snow falls down,
covering his nose,
down, down, down, to the ground!
His face, once happy,
children all clappy,
Is now a frown.
He stands alone,
all bare,
very forlorn,
on a snowy hill.
If only a child,
so happy and wild,
would come along and play!
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January 27th, 2013 at 3:52 pm
What a wonderful poem Charlotte, thank you for sharing it with us. I think my favourite line is ‘ a blanket of frost’.
January 27th, 2013 at 3:53 pm
Dear Charlotte,
Your poem is amazing. I like how you have made it rhyme ‘…frost’ and ‘…lost’. I also like how you have made the reader really imagine how the ground looks ‘ A blanket of frost.’ Its a really good poem Charlotte!
From Caitlin.
January 28th, 2013 at 7:50 am
Thank you, Caitlin!
January 27th, 2013 at 4:01 pm
Thank You Mrs Duxbury!
January 27th, 2013 at 9:19 pm
WOW Charlotte. Since when were you a poet? You are an amazing writer AND poet. My favourite line is, ‘A blanket of frost.’
I think that you have tried very hard with this poem! Please read my poem at
http://6d2012.highlawnprimary.net/2013/01/26/homework-you-must-read/
Another well done! Keep it up!
From your classmate,
Aamina N
January 29th, 2013 at 7:49 am
Thank you Aamina! I will read yours and leave a comment as lovely as yours!
January 29th, 2013 at 6:50 am
A brilliant poem about the snow Charlotte well done! We all enjoyed the snow up here in Newcastle too, it’s all disappeared now though! If you get a minute have a look at our blog and let us know what you think of our ‘snow toise!!’
January 29th, 2013 at 5:44 pm
Dear Mr Heely,
Thank you for a lovely comment! We loved the snow in Bolton, it was about 10cm deep on Saturday! I had a lot of fun sledging and making snowmen! I think it is very impressiv you made a tortoise out of snow! Very creative!
Charlotte W
January 29th, 2013 at 8:32 am
Wow, Charlotte. I really like how you have used ‘ A blanket of frost ‘.
How long did it take you? Was it hard for you to think of words to rhyme?
From Aamina.I
January 29th, 2013 at 5:37 pm
Thank you Aamina I,
It took me about two hours to do it, but i had a special website, where I could find words that rhyme! Thank you for your lovely comment!
January 29th, 2013 at 6:58 pm
Dear Charlotte,
I really enjoyed this poem. I really like how you have described it so I can really visualise it in my head. I also really like how you have repeated the same word for the first sentance ‘Snow, snow, snow!’ Maybe next time you could add some adverbs, but I sill enjoyed it without! Overall I really enjoyed it. Well done Charlotte, and keep up the good work!
From Julia
January 30th, 2013 at 7:51 am
Thank you Julia,
I could have used some of the sentence types we have used in class to make my poem EVEN better!
January 29th, 2013 at 8:05 pm
Dear Charlotte,
I rally enjoyed reading your poem because you have used grat personification such as ‘a blanket of frost’. Well Done! I can really tell you have tried your best at writing the poem.
You may read my poem if you wish at
http://6d2012.highlawnprimary.net/2013/01/28/the-day-it-rained-poem/
Another Well done from Me,
From your Classmate
Yahya
January 30th, 2013 at 7:50 am
Thank you Yayha,
I have tried my very best to make this my best poem!