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The Water Cycle Snowman
Thank goodness for that ,
I’m losing my hat ,
The gloves and the scarf have gone ,
They all fell away on the very first day when the sun came out and shone .
I’m free to return ,
To my original world ,
Of rain , cloud and seas ,
I’m happiest when I’m liquid , not when I freeze .
I like it best ,
When the wind is in the west ,
I look forward to falling as rain ,
Forming a river again .
The Ocean is me ,
And in it I’m free ,
To begin the whole cycle again ,
Again , again again !
14 Responses to “The Water Cycle Snowman”
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January 25th, 2013 at 1:53 pm
What a great poem. The alliteration in it was great! I was quite impressed! we have also been doing poems and ours were about lightning and monsoons etc and they also had alliteration in them.
January 28th, 2013 at 5:03 pm
Thank you Jack ! I didn’t intend to use alliteration but I must have used some 1 I would love to hear one of your Poems ! Do you have a class blog ? Because I would love to comment on it !
From Charlotte D
January 25th, 2013 at 1:54 pm
Wow very good poem about percipitation. Well done to whoever wrot this, was it Charlotte D or Brian M. I’d love to find out how long it took you to write a quality poem like that. I really like poems that have rhyming in, personification and metaphors.
January 28th, 2013 at 5:00 pm
Thank you Joe , I wrote this poem and it took me half an hour to write it ! I love writing poems and reading them too !
From Charlotte D
January 25th, 2013 at 1:54 pm
Thats a realy cool poem quite funny too amagine if a snowman realy thought that!!!
January 28th, 2013 at 5:04 pm
Thank you , I have imagined the snowman thinking that ! I think he is a bit of a silly snowman , do you ?
From Charlotte D
January 25th, 2013 at 1:54 pm
An excellent poem! I really enjoyed it!
January 28th, 2013 at 5:06 pm
Thank you Jack , do you like writing poems ? I know I certainly do ! I think the snowman is a bit silly though !
From Charlotte D
January 25th, 2013 at 1:58 pm
I really like the idea of the water cycle snowman.Did the poem have to be a wintery,or could you do it about anything,if it had to be wintery I could never think of something that good.I think it is superb and a brillent idea sorry if I said that to much but I really like it.
From Leah.T (Vauvert)
January 28th, 2013 at 5:09 pm
Thank you Leah , no I didn’t have to do it or do it about anything . I like getting comments on my work and I really liked seeing this one . Do you like writing poems ? Have you heard of the water cycle ? Thank you for commenting !
From Charlotte D
January 25th, 2013 at 1:59 pm
I thought this was an amazing poem. There were two ways to write that poem, like you did and like the snowman was sad he was melting. It was very good how you wrote the poem from the snowmans point of view. PS. I really like your blog.
January 28th, 2013 at 5:12 pm
Thank you Jenny , I tried to write it from the snowman’s point of view and I found it a bit sad how he had to melt ! Have you ever written a poem about snow ? If yes , I would love to hear it !
From Charlotte D
January 27th, 2013 at 1:45 pm
Hello Charlotte,
I loved reading your poem! You have used great aliteration in your poem.Your poem had lots of rhyme in it. Maybe next time you could use some personifacation.Overall I enjoyed reading your poem. Keep it up!
January 28th, 2013 at 5:15 pm
Thank you Holly , I really like my poem and I will try and take on board your advice if I was to do it again. I’m glad that you liked my poem !
From Charlotte D