6D 2012 – 2013
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Tired and shivering, persevering yet scared, Millie and he mother walked deeper and deeper into the dark forest. All that was before them was an evergreen, teeming throng of neighbouring trees. They unfortunately couldn’t find the way out, that was why they were meandering deeper into the darkening forest.
Half an hour later, they were still trudging on. Then before their very eyes was a gargantuan crowd of unmissable, shining spaceships that suddenly landed and covered all the ground as far as the eye could see. Their eyes popped out of their heads and shivers ran up their spines like spiders climbing up pieces of furniture.
They were surrounded by a group of menacing looking spaceships containing ALIENS! Some of the aliens were a murkey green; others were a muckey brown, both made Millie’s eyes water with worry yet astonishment. Then they noticed, these spaceships would bring peril to the vulnerable world.
Suddenly they noticed, they were in the center of an alien invasion. The UFO’s had landed and all they could do was watch, wonder sweeping over each others faces. The doors opened. Something stepped out. Millie’s eyes widened and a shiver lept up her unexpecting, almost frozen spine.
Meanwhile, nobody else knew the pandemonium tat was coming. Even though Millies mum was a responsible adult, she did not have a phone to call the police, who could come and save them … BANG! That was it, the aliens were out and ready for trouble. As smoke invaded the air, all they could do was wait.
As the smoke cleared and the darkened land seemed to let the aliens free, out came the danger that was stuffed within the spaceships. The aliens leader spoke in a wobbling voice,
“We’ve come to invade. Your land is the only one left with plants and life, just what we need to survive. This is war of two worlds, yours and mine!”
No words could describe how Millie felt, yet she was going to stand up for the world! Then determinedly she spoke,
“Have you ever even actually planted a tree?” a look of confusion swept over the aliens leader’s face. Millie and her mum then found out, the aliens only ate the trees that were already there, not any that they had planted themselves. They probably didn’t know how. It was time to teach these a lesson in gardening.
Millie had shown the aliens, how to plant a tree and what tree’s needed to grow. All through the lesson the knowledge-less aliens watched with smiles over their curious faces.
Two hours later, it was time to say goodbye, the aliens where putting Millie’s advice to good use. As the spaceship disappeared into the mists Millie and her mum finally saw the way home. Now the aliens knew, if they needed more seeds that it was a great idea to come to earth. Also Millie had noticed, the universe was an extravagant place indeed!
9 Responses to “My Alien Story”
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January 9th, 2013 at 3:10 pm
that was the most amazing story in the hole wide world!
January 9th, 2013 at 10:55 pm
Anna, what a wonderful story. From the very first sentence, I knew it would be good. Your 2 pair sentence had me gripped and wanting to read on.
You have used some wonderful vocabulary and some great literary devices like ‘teeming throng’. This shows me that you are taking the learning from the classroom and applying it to your writing at home. This makes me so proud and you should be too.
I love the clever twist in the story, where the aliens are taught to grow trees. I am wondering where you got this idea from.
One question for you Anna. Do plurals need an apostrophe? When do you need to use an apostrophe?
From Mrs Duxbury
January 10th, 2013 at 2:11 pm
Well done Anna,
this is fabulous you should be an auther you are a exiting writer.
January 10th, 2013 at 4:16 pm
Your story is AMAZING! It really grips the reader, and it never gets boring. I like how you have used sentnces that we have been learning in class like, Other; sentences, and 2 pair sentences. Keep writing stories on the blog Anna, because you will get such a good reply. What made you come up with a story about aliens eating plants, and learning how to grow them? KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK ANNA!
Tegan xx
http://www.6d2012.highlawnprimary.net
January 11th, 2013 at 12:33 pm
I loved yor story well done
January 11th, 2013 at 12:40 pm
Nice story there is some mistakes but good work !
January 11th, 2013 at 4:05 pm
Anna , I think you have the most amazing talent . This is a totally fantastic story . Where ever did you get the idea of stopping an alien invasion by planting a tree ? Keep writing and keep blogging !
January 11th, 2013 at 6:47 pm
I loved your story Anna you have all your vcop in there and its brilliant!
January 13th, 2013 at 2:30 pm
Dear Anna,
I thing your story is amazing! You have got a special talent. Well done !
From Aamina. I