Oct
03

Emily 100 Word Challenge

Filed Under (General News) by on 03-10-2012 and tagged ,

At the top of the huge green hill, there was alot of noise, I walked up the hill to my surprise;  a man was playing the piano, there was fireworks what exploded into the air. Lots of people had turned up, from adults too loads of tiny Children. rain started pour down , people headed for the tents, ubrellas went up to protect from the rain, children played in the puddles, dogs shook their bodies to get dry. Then in next five minutes the rain stopped, the sun started to shine,umbrellas where put away,people came out of the tents. I was sorry, I had to go.



2 Responses to “Emily 100 Word Challenge”

  1.   Aamina I Says:

    Dear Emily,

    Well done, I loved how you used a semi-Colon. You have tryed really hard keep it up! allso I liked how you described the setting.

    Reply

  2.   Miss Cox Says:

    WELL DONE EMILY I LIKE THIS STORY, I CAN SEE YOU HAVE TRIED REALLY HARD.

    LOTS OF LOVE FROM MUM.X

    Reply

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